Re: Fw: Resume/SQA Assistance for Cisco position

[Robert <http://dummy.us.eu.org/robert>]

Comments are in-line below.

 > From: Noelle <http://dummy.us.eu.org/noelleg>
 > Date: Fri, 10 Feb 2012 10:42:00 -0800 (PST)
 >
 > ----- Forwarded Message -----
 > >From: Carl Baltrunas <http://www.reststop.com/~carl>
 > >To: Carl Baltrunas <http://www.reststop.com/~carl> 
 > >Sent: Thursday, February 9, 2012 5:53 PM
 > >Subject: Resume/SQA Assistance for Cisco position
 > > 
 > >Hi Bob, Kip, Noelle and Steven,
 > >
 > >Thank you all for offering your assistance for helping me rework my
 > >resume to apply for a position at Cisco.
 > >
 > >I won't presume any availability on your part, but I do intend to be
 > >working on this tonight, and tomorrow afternoon if I need more time.
 > >Please feel free to call me at 408-945-4321, or drop me an email
 > >letting me know what is a good time to call you.
 > >
 > >I'm enclosing a copy of the job description, and I hear there are two
 > >positions available, which is also good assuming I make it into the
 > >running.
 > >Also, a copy of my year-old resume which I used to apply for a
 > >position at Juniper Networks for a tools developer position for which
 > >I did interview in person.
 > >
 > >I also, since then worked for 10 months as a Tools Developer for
 > >Active Video Networks, but that information isn't in any but my iPhone
 > >resumes and my Linked-In profile, so I'll be adding it, and
 > >appropriate PSRs.
 > >
 > >Pasted Below, is the appropriate info from my Linked-In profile, for
 > >your reading.

In general, two things:

 1) Always start off an achievement with a verb.  It sounds more active.
 2) I personally use the past tense if the archievement was accomplished
    in the past.
 3) The format that I've seen for PSR-like formats is, for example:

     "Increased throughput of data by optimizing the HTTP server,
      implemented in C".

    And, in general, the first part of the sentence should say how things
    changed/improved from before work began on the task to after the work
    finished on the task; the second part of the sentence should include
    possibly what the problem was and how you addressed the problem.
 4) I agree with you that your bullet points are a bit too long for a
    recruiter, but I think they're also too long for a hiring manager.
    Many small bullet points, I think, should be preferred over long
    sentences.  And, in fact, I personally would want it shorter in an
    interview since it gives 'em a chance to talk about the positions.
 5) Since the job is a QA job, I would emphasize "delivering quality" for
    each of your "results" in the PSRs.  Also, decreasing bugs,
    debugging problems, investigating results, etc.